underwhere's 2nd Assignment

[underwhere]

Okay, this is a little messed up. I tried to write this story in the first person present tense because the story itself seemed to beg for it to be written that way, but there was a lot of reference to things that happened in a certain time frame, some of which was in the past, and I don't think I managed to keep my tenses straight. I reckon I'll need an assignment of some sort to work out that writing flaw of mine. Either that, or a good editor.

I really wanted to go back and edit it again, but then I just got overwhelmed with trying to figure out where I thought I had gone wrong and to correct everything from that point forward.

It definitely reads a bit strange to me now. Am I being oversensitive, or do I have a real problem here?

[H Dean]

Okay, this is a little messed up. I tried to write this story in the first person present tense because the story itself seemed to beg for it to be written that way, but there was a lot of reference to things that happened in a certain time frame, some of which was in the past, and I don't think I managed to keep my tenses straight. I reckon I'll need an assignment of some sort to work out that writing flaw of mine. Either that, or a good editor.

I really wanted to go back and edit it again, but then I just got overwhelmed with trying to figure out where I thought I had gone wrong and to correct everything from that point forward.

It definitely reads a bit strange to me now. Am I being oversensitive, or do I have a real problem here?

Looks like we were typing at the same time. It reads strangely. You aren't oversensitive, but it is good you picked up on it as quickly as you did.

[underwhere]

Okay, thanks H Dean. At least I know I'm on to something here that I hope will be constructive for me. Now comes the real challenge of how to fix it.

Remind me to avoid in the future trying to write a first person present tense story when wishing to include information from the recent past. That is so much easier to do with a third person perspective. Either that or give me some real good pointers for how to avoid this mess in the future.

Hey, at least I really enjoy the whole writing process. I am definitely here to learn, though, so come what may, I want to become a better writer. Like I wrote in my original query about the writer's block, I have rather little experience writing fiction, so maybe this is just something I will need to learn how to overcome by trial and error.