Quote Originally Posted by Venom View Post
There are, though, some minor things I would revise, for example:

I "recruit" beautiful young women - and men, to Isla Castilla.

Better write 'I "recruit" beautiful young women and men to Isla Castilla' or 'I "recruit" beautiful young women -- and men -- to Isla Castilla'.

All in all a narration worth reading.
Thank you very much for your criticism. I struggled with that part, and I will certainly take your revision under consideration.