Hi LC,

You've been battered and bruised over a wonderful story.
A rewrite isn't in order, just a few edits to make it better.

Do you have to do it right now? No.
Give it a rest. Come back at it fresh another day.
When you do "tackle" it again, think of it as an old friend that needs her make-up redone. A few swishes of the magic make-up wand aka brush and she's good to go.

Meanwhile, I'd like you to answer the following questions:

a. What did or didn't you like about writing in this style?
b. What was easy or difficult for you?
c. Do you think you'd enjoy writing in this style again?

I'll be sending you a new assignment in a PM.

Cheers,

Ruby