TYWD's Preliminary 3rd level assignment.

[Mad Lews]

I know about the full stops (periods) before conjunctions and the like. I've already been told-off about them by Aussiegirl and by Dragon's Muse. The thing is, I like short sentences. And I like adding to them. It's like pushing a row of toy cars along a table top. Until they fall ... building tension or speeding the narration. Especially in the present tense. Or at the points you have highlighted (... practical person. Good with his hands ... and ... straight out of school. And he was.) I was listing Bill's attributes in a stream of thought manner, and concluding them with an affirmative "he was".

But I know it pisses people off because I over-use it: even here I'm doing it! I will try to restrain myself more.


TYWD.

TYWD,

You're more likely to get away with it if both phrases, separated by a period, are complete sentences. That was not the case in the first instance. In the second simply dropping the And in the second phrase would have accomplished your goal with greater economy. (or : ) and without offending those readers who are grammar stylist. economy. Without offending those readers who are grammar stylist.

yours
Mad