Level Three-tessa's 3rd Assignment

[tessa]

Your comments are in no way out of turn, ThisYouWillDo, and I appreciate them greatly! Wow. Very constructive and helpful! These comments help me think my story to a better place. I am indeed grateful.

"Her ravager..." Thank you for that! If you knew how long I sat and stared at that 'puter screen trying to think of another word besides "individual", you'd laugh at me. Well, I guess you do know now, so laugh away. This will help me lots, so my thanks again for being such a grand thesaurus on this one.

The ending- guilty as charged. I could have taken more time to work that out, but didn't. Impatience and eagerness win out over thoughtful consideration again. ~sighs~ Re-working the ending, well, this I will do. ~smiles at my slightly punny cleverness~

And about points of view, Ms. Ruby instructions stated that I was to take the Dom's or sub's perspective. I chose the Dom. He seemed to be having the most fun at the moment. I'm toying with the idea of writing this same stroy from his slave's perspective. Perhaps when time allows...

Seriously, I do appreciate your time on this. I know what it takes and it means so much to me that you did this.

tessa