I agree the first was the best IMHO

A few thoughts on #7
Bad End
Ending #7
A Lover Scorned
By Razor7826

Kelly Hill knocked on the door of apartment 318B of the Shaded Meadows apartment complex. As usual for these special days, the twenty-three year old lawyer wore a shawl to cover her bobbed black hair, as well as sunglasses to cover her large green eyes. Specializing in family law required that she keep much of her social life hidden from the public, most of all her deviant sex life. (Ok I don’t think she would call it “Deviant” maybe unusual tastes)

The door opened, and a beautiful woman in her thirties led Kelly into the apartment. The older woman, Rachel Edwards, grabbed Kelly in a strong hug against her sleek red dress and gave her a long and deep kiss. Kelly returned the affection.

For the last three months, Kelly and Rachel were in a secret relationship. While Kelly was out to her family and friends, her professional life required secrecy with regards to her sexuality, for word of her lesbianism (a lesbian affair) would destroy her practice.

Rachel Edwards was the perfect woman for Kelly Hill, and the two women of them were quickly growing close to each other. She understood Kelly’s professional situation, and was willing to keep their relationship quiet, as long as she knew that Kelly’s heart belonged to her. Not only were they growing more intimate, but they both had a completely trusting giving sex life (This is awkward say it another way or drop it), each woman willing to do whatever was necessary to please the other.

Their recent encounters took a turn to( toward trust issues and bondage)I think the story is about trust and betrayal I wouldn't even feel a need to mention BDSM BDSM, with their current interests falling on sexual bindings. Both women found it incredibly hot and satisfying to bind the other woman’s limbs with bandages, then fuck them with a strap on dildo.

Rachel reached her hand out to Kelly’s chin and grinned. “Today is my turn to tie you up, teehehe.( OK this is just me but I’m never thrilled with sound effects .” She giggled, might work as well as teehehe”) She was playful, as usual, and Kelly would be happy to oblige. Both women grinned with anticipation as Rachel led Kelly into her bedroom.

That’s strange, Kelly thought, as she noticed the room (door?) to Rachel’s other bedroom was closed. She dismissed the thought as unimportant, and in the master bedroom she began the foreplay. For today, Kelly took on a more submissive roll, letting Rachel slowly disrobe her. Once she was fully naked, Rachel pushed her down onto the bed and began the binding. She bent each of her limbs at the elbows and ankles, where Rachel was ready to encase them in layer upon layer of cloth bandages. By the time the bindings were complete, Kelly looked like she had no hands or feet, the bandages giving the impression that she was a quadruple amputee. Rachel could see that Kelly was hot and ready, but instead of pulling a dildo from her nightstand, she pulled out a manila envelope.

“Kelly, before we continue, I have something important to ask you.”

“What do you need, honey?”

Rachel pulled photographs from the envelope and held them in front of her girlfriend’s face. The photographs clearly showed Kelly fucking a man, and she looked like she was having the time of her life. “Did you think I wouldn’t find out.”

“I can explain... please… it was a one time thing.”

“That is also a lie. I have photos of two separate occasions.” The lie was exposed. Kelly had been seeing Mark, one of her superiors at her law firm. While there were the career incentives the activities, Rachel was right- she did enjoy the sex.

“I… I love you, Rachel. Mark doesn’t change that.”

“Fuck you, you lying bitch! Whatever the hell you are, you’re not a lesbian, and you’ll fucking pay for leading me on like this.” Rachel was furious, but she also began to cry, the pain of Kelly’s infidelities clearly tearing at her soul. The older woman reached into her night stand and pulled out a ball gag, which she quickly fastened around Kelly’s head. Kelly tried to resist, but it was no use, the bindings leaving her completely helpless against a woman that just moments ago she had placed her complete trust in.

With her former girlfriend bound and gagged, Rachel left the room and Kelly’s line of sight. Kelly could hear voices outside, and a few moments later Rachel returned with two unfamiliar, naked, men behind her. “Alex, Zach... do whatever you want with her, I don’t care.” Rachel left the room, and the two white men approached the defenseless captive. She tried to bat them off were her stub limbs, but her attempts proved useless as each of the men grabbed two of her stumps and held her in the air. Reader needs a little more graphic info for this image, horizontal? Vertical? sandwiched between them? Paint us a picture. The positioning of her legs gave no defenses as the men shoved their stiff penises into her asshole and pussy (maybe from her perspective first the tearing pain of dry penetration as they impaled her from the front and rear). Never before had she been double penetrated Now the guys perspective, the giddy joy as they thrust with abandon her struggles urging them on , and the pain was almost unbearable. She screamed and screamed into the gag as the men raped her repeatedly, but her muffled moans drew no saviors.

Later that night, the two men finally tired of the prone, cum covered sex toy. Rachel returned to the room and looked over her former girlfriend, still unsatisfied with the punishment visited upon her. “Get that fucking bitch out of my sight. You guys can keep her.”Nah, sell her for a few hundred bucks (NOT THIRTY PIECES OF SILVER that's too blatant)

Alex turned to Rachel, “You know what we’ll end up doing to her… right?”

Rachel knew exactly what they would do. “Yes, I am aware. I want that bitch to suffer for a long, long time. Take her car, too.” Alex got dressed and went out to his van, and returned with a large tote bag. With some help from Rachel and Zach, he managed to fit Kelly into the bag, which he zipped up almost all the way, showing some concern for her breathing. Rachel barely gave it a thought as the men carried Kelly Hill out of her life, the anger over her infidelity still tearing at her mind.
Over the following weeks and months, Rachel Edwards had brief moments where she regretted giving Kelly away to be sold as a sex slave. Finally, she saved and approached her friends, asking if she could do anything to get her friend and lover back, realizing that Kelly truly was special to her. Unfortunately, her friends told her it was too late, that no records of any kind were kept beyond the first buyer.

For years to come, Rachel would regret her mistake, but not nearly as much as Kelly Hill.

BAD END #7
Even though you are writing in third person you still need to emote the feelings of those involved. When you describe actions try to do it as your characters would see it. When your characters react try to let the reader follow the reasons and reasoning.
OK the ending regret needs to be developed, Anger fades to regrets, you need to explain to the readers why. Did she lose something special when she sold Kelly? I also think she should sell ,not give her away. It makes the sin of betrayal more complete.You might also give the reader a bit more of a taste as to what Kelly's new life is like