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[Mad Lews]

The story is quite well written, plotted out with care, no real inconsistencies.
Couple of typos, pronoun gaffs (He substituted for she can make the reader stumble for a few secs)
and those damn homonyms do rear their ugly head on occasion. It's all minor stuff that tends to be inevitable on a long story so an independent proof read or three will always help.
The major problem was a lack of an ending, readers do like something to close on.
Of course maybe that is in the works.
Mad Lews