Dear veru skjava,

Thank you very much for your offer of assistance. I've got an updated version of my prolog that I've not posted yet. If you contact me:

serpentiness at netscape dot net

I'll be happy to send you my story for a look. I'm also thinking about getting into chapter one, and when I do, I'll need lots of help with proofreading.

Again, Thank you for your kind offer

~Serpentiness