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Oh to be thin
Author: SG
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(Added on Jul 24, 2008)
(This month 68846 readers) (Total 84737 readers) |
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Rachel's plan to diet by excercise backfires when some unexpected guests pay her a visit |
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Average (?):  (6.5/10) |
Average
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Oct 11, 2010 |
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Story irritated me no end because of the use of the word 'table' seven times in six consecutive sentences. Get a synonym dictionary, or restructure your sentences, please.
Story was, besides my irritations, a nice read, with a likable character in the form Erin.
SG's inventiveness is what 'saves' the story in the end. Because, and although "Oh To Be Thin" is a nice read, it also is constructed rather clumsily.
JJ (8/10)
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